Wednesday, May 29, 2013

10 minute writing assesment

                                                **My 10 minute writing assesment**

Tears streamed down my little face as I fell through the clouds. No. This couldn't be happening. "Mama!" I cried. She couldn't hear me, I was too far away. I would never see her again. I hit the ground with a thud and shivering, I curled up into a ball on the cold, hard ground.

Many years passed. My life was lonely. Empty. Whenever I thought about that fateful day it was too painful to bear. So I set out on a mission. I would find her, I had to. I searched and searched, but I couldn't find her. I gave up all hope and sat down on a stump. To my surprise it shot up and up and up. In fact, it reached the clouds! I hopped off, eager to explore. I might find Mama here! I mean, this was where I last saw her.

I searched and searched, stepping through layers of thick, poofy, bouncy cloud. Then I saw her. She was sitting in a pile of  flowers, weeping. "Mama!" I yelled. She looked up, tears in her eyes.

By GT :)

13 comments:

Anonymous said...

To grace
Your sample was cool!

Anonymous said...

Well done GT, it was an amazing assement! Especially as you wrote it in 10 mins.

Anonymous said...

To Grace
Cool story! It is very interesting, i'd love to hear the end of it. Why was the mother crying?

K.R.M

Anonymous said...

To Kirsty
The mother was crying at the end because she thought she wouold never see the child again.
G.T

Eden said...

Amazing story Grace.I liked the part we the stork shot up too the clouds.

Cyber Kids said...

NathanSaid
That was very discreptive and very interseting

Holly M said...

Dear Grace
I loved your story! I especially really liked how you ended it. Great job!

emo890 said...

Awesome!! I loved the story. ALthough, why was the mother crying? Did she stop? Was she crying because of losing her son? Did something else bad happened? other than that I loved your story and I hope you write more. :)

Anonymous said...

To K.R.M,
Thanks! Well, I guess she was crying because she was sad and she thought she wouldn't see the child again.
G.T

Anonymous said...

To Holly M.
Thanks! - G.T

Anonymous said...

To Eden,
Thank you!
G.T

Anonymous said...

Thanks Nathan
G.T

Anonymous said...

To emo890
Thanks! The mother was crying because she thought she would never see the child again. G.T